導讀TPO42:IndependentWritingDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Workersa....

TPO 42: Independent Writing

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.

Recently, there has been a heated debate about a question whether workers are of more satisfaction when they are assigned different tasks. The debate divides people into two groups, one of which believes that the type of work assigned has no impact on worker’s happiness.（盡量避免套話式的開頭，建議針對不同題型和話題設計適合的背景句） However, from my perspective, I agree with the idea（為避免歧義，建議直接說明自己的觀點） that the type of work matters（沒有完整且直接地回答題目的問題）, based on the following reasons. （請對主體段分論點進行完整地概括，不建議使用此類套話）

First and foremost, the main reason of （借此使用錯誤，替換成for）my propensity（這個單詞通常用來解釋傾向性，而非觀點，建議替換成opinion） is that the switch（switch是可數名詞，建議使用a switch） among various tasks can help worker（名詞單復數錯誤，workers） to relax. In the absence of such switch（switch是可數名詞，建議使用a switch）, worker will have to focus on one thing for a long time, which will make him very exhausted. An example from my own experience can serve as further（之前沒有舉例子，不需要用further表示遞進） illustration. I used to be an auditor for a big accounting firm. Employee（兩個句子建議用where鏈接合并成一個句子） who work for the firm suffered from great pressure from the urgent schedule and heavy workload. However, I found it would be easier if I deal（dealt，時態需保持一致） with different tasks in a workday, say,（避免口語化表達） analyzing the financial statement in the morning and conducting auditing procedure in the afternoon. This case is not rare（這個句子沒有說完，建議補充in other industries and scenarios）. Even in the（非特質，無需冠詞，建議刪除the） primary school, the school will set many kinds of（語言啰嗦，刪除） subjects for students, so that they won’t get bored of always learning the same subject.（缺乏段落小結句）

Secondly, another point should be taken into account is that to deal with different tasks can give workers a bigger sense of achievement. The channel-switching process can offer a good opportunity for one to feel that he is capable of doing many things, instead of some（替換成a） robot who can only handle a small range of tasks. A good case in point is that （類比的論證方法上一段已經用過了，不建議重復使用）some coach in National Basketball association will involve as many as players into the process of scoring, though the main functions of some players are only to provide a good defense, because they will be more positive if they feel that they are needed in other area, and hence improving their performance on the defense. The underlying logic can also be applied（apply可以用主動形式） to this scenario that if workers are given more chances to show their talents in other fields, they will be more satisfied, which leads to a higher performance. （段落并沒有說清楚具體為什么可以更加satisfied，也缺乏有效的小結句）

（建議補充讓步段）

Judging from the reasons and examples mentioned above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that worker should be assigned a variety of tasks during the workday. （結尾段沒有直接回答題目的問題）

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作文得分：

語言豐富度：3分

語言準確度：3分

結構完整性：4分

扣題和邏輯：3分

綜合評分：3.25分

作文等級：Fair

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